Mr Nosey by Christie
Mr Nosey
Mr Nosey is a very weird man he is 407 years old he always walks behind people and listens to their conversations. He wears bright orange trousers and a pink top. I think he wears weird clothes.
Mr Nosey has green hair and is very tall, he hates children. If he sees one he will turn into a chicken and his face goes bright red. He has no friends and family because he is so nosey and weird.
Sometimes people talk about him when people see him behind them. Mr Nosey has a really big beard, it touches his feet and sometimes he trips over it and sometimes his face lands in mud!
Mr Nosey is a very weird man he is 407 years old he always walks behind people and listens to their conversations. He wears bright orange trousers and a pink top. I think he wears weird clothes.
Mr Nosey has green hair and is very tall, he hates children. If he sees one he will turn into a chicken and his face goes bright red. He has no friends and family because he is so nosey and weird.
Sometimes people talk about him when people see him behind them. Mr Nosey has a really big beard, it touches his feet and sometimes he trips over it and sometimes his face lands in mud!
posted by Ruairidh and Tanya at 1:50 AM
3 Comments:
You have described what he looks like very well
You have said what you think
Try and make it a little bit longer next time and talk more about how he feels about things.
I think you hav a good story but you shold try to describe it more. Like you could have said that he wears a pink polo neck or somthing like that. Also I dont think 'sees' is a propper word. Appart from that I think it was very good!
I thought that it was good but you shouldn't have started every sentence with "He".
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